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    What if you made everything 50% shorter?

    What if you got a text message like this:

     

    text-examples2

    It almost seems unnecessary for the person typing AND the person reading.

    Why can’t this be shortened down to something nice and sweet like this:

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    Now all the Grammar Nazi’s in the world will revolt at the literary atrocity above……but isn’t this just WAY MORE DAMN EFFICIENT?

    • It uses less characters.
    • It takes less time to write.
    • It takes less time to read.
    • It uses the already pre-defined context to transmit a message (you were obviously trying to meet Jason at a movie).

    When transmitting information from one brain to another, sometimes there are ways you can hack the length shorter…..and thus make it more effective.

    But there’s this legend in the marketing community that somehow Longer = Better.  (insert your own penis joke here)!

     

     

    It’s kinda true in some ways, look at all these charts that show longer articles get more viral:

    (This is the part of the article where I jack a bunch of charts from other websites to make what I’m saying more believable)!

    longcontent-1Yup….proves my point.

     

    longcontent-2See?  I told you.

     

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    Damn skippy.

     

     

    But here’s the thing:

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    Lemme show you some examples of how lots of information can be crammed into a small package:

     

    FIRST EXAMPLE:

    I remember my favorite image I ever made was on my first sales page, it looked like this (‘HoR’ stood for ‘House Of Rave’):

    chocolate-bar-packaging-how-hor-works(I thought I was sooooo cool for making it in Photoshop even though it was a template I used).

    WORD COUNT: 20.

    There’s only a total of 20 words in this picture, BUT, let’s break down the sheet amount of context that your brain spools up when seeing the image:

    (You don’t have to read this whole list….i’m just breaking it down byte-by-byte to show the volume):

    • The picture is of a familiar Snickers bar package.
    • The “bite sized” reference is a reference to an old Snickers bar advertising campaign.
    • The “wrapped up” reference is referring to how a Snickers bar is wrapped up.
    • You are understanding that if you buy the copywriting course it’s small and quick to digest.
    • You are understanding you will learn this information quickly.

    See how much bang-per-word I got?  Nice.

     

    SECOND EXAMPLE:

    Chris runs an online hearing aid store called EarMall.  He also sells refurbished hearing aids.

    He had a bunch of copy about how in the medical industry, anything that’s considered “refurbished” has an ENORMOUS mark-down making them like 6x cheaper.  There’s also another little secret that showroom models, or units that’ve been returned because of sizing mis-matches, or any unsold inventory are all considered “refurbished”.

    For this reason he can sell the EXACT SAME HEARING AID for hella cheaper.

    But instead of relaying this in a lot of text, he could so the same in a much shorter span.  Here’s the original text about this process in an email:

    WORD COUNT: 396

    hearing-aid-ad3

    So what if we re-did all the text explaining why refurbished hearing aids are much cheaper and got people’s attention with THIS instead (which is way more “grabby”):

    hearing-aid-ad2

    -or-

    hearing-aid-ad1

    Now Chris can still use his sales copy to get people interested, but a easy-to-understand image can capture the attention FAR better in this situation.

     

    THIRD EXAMPLE:

    Tanuja business LoveBitesByTanuja makes desserts from healthy stuff and is trying to appeal to the Paleo-type crowd who wants to eat desserts, but not get all the sugar & crap that goes in them.

    This is easily explained in long-form copy, but here’s the kicker:

    Most of Tanuja’s sales come from INSTAGRAM! 

    That means at most you get one picture to explain your product!  So long form sales copy in the Instagram format is much more difficult as you have to get people to SEE A PICTURE –> GET THEM TO CLICK A LINK –> READ LONG COPY ON PHONE.

    So here’s some sales copy Tanuja has to sell her desserts through email:

    WORD COUNT: 782

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    Ok….that’s nice and all.  And probably would work in some distribution channels like email.  HOWEVER, what if you instead distilled that same message down to a much smaller one, like this:

    cookies-ad

    -or-

    lovebites2

    -or-

    lovebites3

     

    Basically you can cut the message size down DRAMATICALLY to initially get people’s attention.  Then once their attention is captured, you can start going into your main point.  

    I bet there’s a way you can effectively communicate just SOMETHING in your life today at least 50% shorter.  It’ll save you and the recipient both lots of time :)

     

    Sincerely,

    Neville Noshir Medhora…..or “Nev” for short!

     

    P.S.……If you shorten something today, share it in the comments below.  Or if you have an example of something that conveys A LOT OF INFORMATION in a SHORT timeframe, post it in the comments below also!

      

    sources    sources    sources    sources    sources

    http://blog.newswhip.com/index.php/2013/12/article-length

    http://buzzsumo.com/blog/long-form-content-improves-content-marketing-conclusion-7-recent-studies/

    http://www.lovebitesbytanuja.com

    http://www.behindthescenesofamuse.com

    http://www.earmall.com


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    Guest Shawn

    Posted

    Been doing this for years. 90% of the time I shorten emails before sending them. Get your point across. Spit it out. Don't waste people's time.
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    Guest Neville

    Posted

    No prob Jason! I love video, but it's currently inherently harder to view than text.

    Obviously it has a lot of benefits too, but being "quick and easy to view" is not one of them.

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    Guest Jevon

    Posted

    No b.s: I'm sold on the NevBox! I want one!

    I'm always trying to keep my content short and relevant to the brand that I'm making. I'm trying to do it on Medium, and I've found that C.J. Adams is pretty damn good at it. Great article Nev!

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    Guest Karl G

    Posted

    Great information!!

    I just changed two sentences in a pitch email I sent to a potential client. Now it sounds powerful, instead of just another salesy email.

    Thanks for that. I feel like I already won (We'll really see when I call the potential client)

    As for the NevBox, I hope I get it!

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    Ei Nev,

    What about your famous copy about the HoR, quick-sell-kopywriting-experiment? You had one with pictures then moved to a long long one with text and it happened to work much better. We end at the idea that short or long doesn't matter. The important thing is that is good or not. However, as they say in Spanish: Lo bueno si breve, dos veces bueno (Good things that are short, are twice good). This wisdom probably it exists in most languages.

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    Guest Jesse

    Posted

    I am going through a redesign of my website and using your Kopywriting Checklist. It's forcing me to get rid of all the "Jesse got X degree in 2008 and Master's of Y in 2011. He specializes in aerospace soldering techniques and boring you to death by talking about himself."

    (See how unreadable the above paragraph is?)

    Now I'm focusing on the value the customer gets, and making knockout headlines that grab attention.

    And NOOOOW I'm making everything shorter.

    Keep it coming N-dogg!

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    Guest Bruno

    Posted

    loved it.

    It's Pareto's law meets copy:

    Which 20% of the copy creates 80% of the impact?

    Cheers from Mexico!

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    Guest Jeremy Montoya

    Posted

    I started emailing my list daily about two weeks ago, but instead of sending them long posts, I've been telling short stories that relate back to my topic (podcast marketing & list building)...

    I've never gotten so many (positive) responses.

    (most figure they would be bugging their readers)

    I agree, quality is king in the online world!

    - Jeremy

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    Guest Guillermo

    Posted

    A girl in my office asked if a client had paid for advertising, she said if I could answer without bells or whistles so I responded: No.

    Proof: http://i.imgur.com/z2bCxJI.png?1

    In a market research session we had did something called "Fit it in a Tweet". If you can't get the main idea across in 140 characters, try thinking about it again. It becomes more fun if you have to add a hasthag.

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    Guest Annette Walker

    Posted

    When I speak at events & business meetings, I distill my talks into a handout. Always run out so I also show link to where to download as PDF.

    Diagrams, short blubs, checklists, incomplete sentences. Key points, highlights. Called them "cheat sheets."

    For the first one, I used a PDF from an early AppSumo course you did. Was a quick template. Hack ... shortcut ... smartcut. Call it what you want. My own content, of course, to match my talk.

    Improved the layout and design over time. Even adopted your "staggered list" suggestion from your "This book will teach you how to write better." (Love that one!)

    Always profusely thanked for handouts. Something unique these days. Brought in clients when I offerred consulting.

    Have since pulled all these cheatsheets together & are a part of a paid members area.

    Rebooting my business right now and am always working at copywriting. I suffer from the geek affliction of over-complicating things and talking about features. (Ack!) Would love an elusive NevBox.

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    Horror Stories in 2 Sentences demonstrate that quality is more important than length:

    "You know that weird, full-body twitch you get sometimes when you're falling asleep? If there was a camera pointed at you, and you saw what it captured at that moment... you'd never sleep again. "

    "I just saw my reflection blink."

    "The doctors told the amputee he might experience a phantom limb from time to time. Nobody prepared him for the moments though, when he felt cold fingers brush across his phantom hand."

    "The grinning face stared at me from the darkness beyond my bedroom window. I live on the 14th floor."

    "I begin tucking him into bed and he tells me, “Daddy check for monsters under my bed.” I look underneath for his amusement and see him, another him, under the bed, staring back at me quivering and whispering, “Daddy there’s somebody on my bed."

    "They celebrated the first successful cryogenic freezing. He had no way of letting them know he was still conscious."

    There's more where these came from!!

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    Agree! I don't read long sales letters -- I go straight to the bottom.

    I have neither time, nor patience to waste.

    BBC - style communication ? Any time!

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    Guest Hoo Kang

    Posted

    One of my most effective email campaigns was 9 words.
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    Guest Daniel Verdugo

    Posted

    I am a salesman, and I have been in some presentations that salespeople spend more than an hour presenting, I have realized that when you speak to the point, and worry about what people really want, people are more interested and get better results. You are right Neville !

    By the way I read you everyday. Once I emailed you and I said you are one of my mentors in business, I have bought so many products you have created, if you send the NEVBOX to Mexico City, you could make a Mexican guy soooooooooooooooo Happy !

    Thank you for my NevBox Neville !

    =)

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    Guest Matt Hall

    Posted

    True dat.

    I've been working on a landing page for a month. Can't crack it. But your post gave me an idea that would work great.

    -Enticing Pre-headline

    -Sexy Headline

    -Smart Subheadline

    -BRIEF sentence explaining more

    -"Why should you care? Here's how you've missed out because you don't have PRODUCT."

    -Then a list of benefit BULLETS.

    -CTA

    Bam.

    Nev, my friend, you just helped me crack a month's worth frustration. I owe you (and the other Sumos) some tacos if I ever come to Austin.

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    Guest Funny Driver

    Posted

    I work as PM/Tech-Lead and often I need to read tech-specs that are going on and on and on and .......

    But the best story was when I was taking over a project because the other PM was leaving the company. He wrote a 15 page document that explained the first stage of the project.

    Too get a deeper knowledge of the topic, I've worked trough the document and mad a very simple diagram (Libre Office - Draw - nothing fancy).

    During the first meeting with the client, the PM has opened his long documentation and started to scroll back and forward to find all passages we were speaking about.

    After 15 minutes (7 of them spend only for scrolling and searching). I've asked for the projector cable, connected my laptop and displayed my simple diagram.

    This was structured and simple enough so that every one understood all the necessary steps. We spend the next 4 hours in discussion white out changing the picture.

    We need to UNLEARN the useless school formula, that was pound in our brain

    “write more to be better”!

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    Guest Chris Huddleston

    Posted

    Thanks using my email as an example, Neville (and for making it better) : )
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    Guest Michael

    Posted

    Those are awesome! Thanks for sharing. Great inspiration, actually.
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    Guest Chris Huddleston

    Posted

    Hey, Neville,

    Are you still looking for a writer/editor? If so, does the person have to live in Austin, or can they telecommute? I love Austin, but I live in West Virginia.

    Obviously, you know that I can at least string some words and sentences together based on the Autoresponder Klass, but here's a link to a Kindle book I wrote under a pen name. I've also taught English classes at a university.

    I initially messaged you about it on facebook, but it said it went to your 'other' folder, and I didn't want to ask in Klass. I thought you would definitely see it here.

    http://www.amazon.com/How-Defeat-Anxiety-Panic-Attacks-ebook/dp/B00H6UB17I/ref=sr_1_2?ie=UTF8&qid=1426173732&sr=8-2&keywords=chris+haynes

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