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    What if you made everything 50% shorter?

    What if you got a text message like this:

     

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    It almost seems unnecessary for the person typing AND the person reading.

    Why can’t this be shortened down to something nice and sweet like this:

    text-examples-1

    Now all the Grammar Nazi’s in the world will revolt at the literary atrocity above……but isn’t this just WAY MORE DAMN EFFICIENT?

    • It uses less characters.
    • It takes less time to write.
    • It takes less time to read.
    • It uses the already pre-defined context to transmit a message (you were obviously trying to meet Jason at a movie).

    When transmitting information from one brain to another, sometimes there are ways you can hack the length shorter…..and thus make it more effective.

    But there’s this legend in the marketing community that somehow Longer = Better.  (insert your own penis joke here)!

     

     

    It’s kinda true in some ways, look at all these charts that show longer articles get more viral:

    (This is the part of the article where I jack a bunch of charts from other websites to make what I’m saying more believable)!

    longcontent-1Yup….proves my point.

     

    longcontent-2See?  I told you.

     

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    Damn skippy.

     

     

    But here’s the thing:

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    Lemme show you some examples of how lots of information can be crammed into a small package:

     

    FIRST EXAMPLE:

    I remember my favorite image I ever made was on my first sales page, it looked like this (‘HoR’ stood for ‘House Of Rave’):

    chocolate-bar-packaging-how-hor-works(I thought I was sooooo cool for making it in Photoshop even though it was a template I used).

    WORD COUNT: 20.

    There’s only a total of 20 words in this picture, BUT, let’s break down the sheet amount of context that your brain spools up when seeing the image:

    (You don’t have to read this whole list….i’m just breaking it down byte-by-byte to show the volume):

    • The picture is of a familiar Snickers bar package.
    • The “bite sized” reference is a reference to an old Snickers bar advertising campaign.
    • The “wrapped up” reference is referring to how a Snickers bar is wrapped up.
    • You are understanding that if you buy the copywriting course it’s small and quick to digest.
    • You are understanding you will learn this information quickly.

    See how much bang-per-word I got?  Nice.

     

    SECOND EXAMPLE:

    Chris runs an online hearing aid store called EarMall.  He also sells refurbished hearing aids.

    He had a bunch of copy about how in the medical industry, anything that’s considered “refurbished” has an ENORMOUS mark-down making them like 6x cheaper.  There’s also another little secret that showroom models, or units that’ve been returned because of sizing mis-matches, or any unsold inventory are all considered “refurbished”.

    For this reason he can sell the EXACT SAME HEARING AID for hella cheaper.

    But instead of relaying this in a lot of text, he could so the same in a much shorter span.  Here’s the original text about this process in an email:

    WORD COUNT: 396

    hearing-aid-ad3

    So what if we re-did all the text explaining why refurbished hearing aids are much cheaper and got people’s attention with THIS instead (which is way more “grabby”):

    hearing-aid-ad2

    -or-

    hearing-aid-ad1

    Now Chris can still use his sales copy to get people interested, but a easy-to-understand image can capture the attention FAR better in this situation.

     

    THIRD EXAMPLE:

    Tanuja business LoveBitesByTanuja makes desserts from healthy stuff and is trying to appeal to the Paleo-type crowd who wants to eat desserts, but not get all the sugar & crap that goes in them.

    This is easily explained in long-form copy, but here’s the kicker:

    Most of Tanuja’s sales come from INSTAGRAM! 

    That means at most you get one picture to explain your product!  So long form sales copy in the Instagram format is much more difficult as you have to get people to SEE A PICTURE –> GET THEM TO CLICK A LINK –> READ LONG COPY ON PHONE.

    So here’s some sales copy Tanuja has to sell her desserts through email:

    WORD COUNT: 782

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    Ok….that’s nice and all.  And probably would work in some distribution channels like email.  HOWEVER, what if you instead distilled that same message down to a much smaller one, like this:

    cookies-ad

    -or-

    lovebites2

    -or-

    lovebites3

     

    Basically you can cut the message size down DRAMATICALLY to initially get people’s attention.  Then once their attention is captured, you can start going into your main point.  

    I bet there’s a way you can effectively communicate just SOMETHING in your life today at least 50% shorter.  It’ll save you and the recipient both lots of time :)

     

    Sincerely,

    Neville Noshir Medhora…..or “Nev” for short!

     

    P.S.……If you shorten something today, share it in the comments below.  Or if you have an example of something that conveys A LOT OF INFORMATION in a SHORT timeframe, post it in the comments below also!

      

    sources    sources    sources    sources    sources

    http://blog.newswhip.com/index.php/2013/12/article-length

    http://buzzsumo.com/blog/long-form-content-improves-content-marketing-conclusion-7-recent-studies/

    http://www.lovebitesbytanuja.com

    http://www.behindthescenesofamuse.com

    http://www.earmall.com


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    Videos are also annoying because you can't (shouldn't?) scan them when pooping in a public restroom.
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    Forgot to mention ==> his 2 goals in writing and re-writing his video scripts are:

    - make them Clearer.

    - make them Shorter.

    He "gets it" :D

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    Guest Aida Mustapha

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    Yes, short is better. But there's no way to forgo correct grammar just to make our point short and precise. If someone text me 'where u', i'll ignore the message promptly. The use of graphic and interesting texts to send our point across is interesting, they sure give me some ideas for my own projects. Thanks :)
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    Guest Joel Wilson

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    That's a great example. Also, he's pretty intense with the amount of drafts he goes through!
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    Guest Joel Wilson

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    Here's another example that might interest some of you. It's a twitter account that publishes micro Science Fiction and Fiction stories in a tweet. That's like making it 50% shorter to the 10th degree!

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    Guest Michele

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    I'm sending this to my mom. I'm copy editing her sales page and she's a fan of commas and flowery words. That's what a Masters will do to you.
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    Guest Michael

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    Neville! I've been watching for a winner. BTW, your fly is undone.
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    Guest Terence

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    To the point, may I bring back Hemingway from the dead. He supposedly won a bet by writing the shortest short-story ever "For sale, baby shoes. Never worn."

    Has it all: mystery, sadness, and wonder.

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    I compile safety files for my company and to make sure they approve it fast, I make it as long winded and horrible a read as possible.

    Extra time put in to win some time.

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    The way to stand out is to be different to the rest. Like the 5 year old's drawing of a race car for the racing game.
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    I have seen the same with our sales people. They go off on a rant about all the technical shit about automation and ignore the fact that they are talking to accountants.

    Saw a group fall asleep. The sales guy just kept on going. Laughed and then told him to stop.

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    Sorry. I was a bit of an asshole but I still didn't read it.
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    Guest dearzver

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    I loved your blog.Really looking forward to read more. Great. oqza
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    Guest 23 Marketing Blogs to Make You a Kick-Ass Marketer

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    […] What if you made everything 50% shorter? […]
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    Do you make private copywriting sells pages?

    How much do you charge for an Amazon listing?

    Dafna.

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    "I optate to optically discern and feel the panache of life again with closed ocular perceivers, so decided to slumber bit longer than customary.Relax this won't hurt anyone, it will evanesce anyway."

    can you write this withing 140 words

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