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    How to create an amazing "About Us" page (tactics from a professional About Page writer)

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    Businesses pay this woman $1,500 to write their "About Us" pages.

    That is Marian Schembari, and she's a copywriter that specializes in About Us pages.

    A $1,500 minimum seems like a CRAZY amount re-writing a single About Us page.  So why is Marian able to charge such high prices?

    I lured Marian to Austin with promises of cupcakes and jellybeans, then STOLE ALL HER SECRETS.

    I made Marian some nice  truth serum  tea and she gave away all the secrets to writing a $1,500 About Us page below:

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    For a page with no clear ROI (unlike a sales page with obvious conversion metrics), it doesn’t make a ton of sense that you’d put a lot of time into an "About Us" page.

    That’s why most About pages suck big time.

    You know the ones... Rambling 3rd-person paragraphs listing out a company's timeline or a contractor's education.

    *Yawn*

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    Don’t worry, I’ll lay out exactly how to write an About page without having to pay me $1,500.  But first, know these two things:

    1.) Your About page is often the most-visited page on your entire website.

    2.) Your story is THE content that will stay in a reader’s head long after they’ve clicked "exit".

    Organizations from start-ups to nonprofits don't pay me $1,500 and say:

    "Write us an About Page please!!!"

    No no no.....

    What these clients pay for is:

    • A story that makes journalists pick up the phone.
    • A value proposition that makes readers sign up for everything they’ve ever created.
    • An offering that makes customers request a beta version of software that’s still in stealth mode.

    Value of an about page

    So let’s dive into how to actually do this:

     

    Step 1.) Understand your "About Page" is often the 2nd-highest visited page behind your homepage.

    I hacked into Neville's private analytics and stole these screenshots from his account:

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    Despite him having a terrible About Us page, people stay on the page for an average of 2min and 3seconds......since he has barely 3 paragraphs of text on his About Page, this means people are ACTUALLY READING what he's saying.

    However since he put very little effort into the page, he's missing some crucial opportunities to hook people in for life, or take an action.

    Don't be dumb like Neville and neglect the 2nd-most visited page on your website!

     

     

    Step 2.) Understand your "About Page" is often the highest "bounce rate" of any page

    Bounce Rate = The percentage of visitors to a website leave after viewing only one page:

    about page bounce rate leaving

    Think about it…

    Whether it was via a Facebook advertisement, Google search, or guest post, a new visitor has landed on your site. Cool. Congratulations!

    Now, these new readers either leave .... OR…. they click "About" in your navigation.

    And that, my friend, is a very clear, screaming statement:

    "I like what I see... Tell me more!"

    You’ve piqued their interest, and it’s your About page’s job to reel them in.

    The problem is, most people slap up a third-person copy/pasted bio from LinkedIn and call it a day.

    The result? You’ve just told that new reader: "Sorry, nothing to see here."

    And instead of that new reader devouring everything you’ve ever created, they click that terrifying "x" and explore someone else’s website.

    Oops.

     

     

    Step 3.) Understand it's your About Page's job to steer the visitor somewhere:

    Think about your About page as a train station—bustling with crowds, each person armed with a different destination and departure schedule.

    These visitors have one thing in common: They want to get somewhere!

    It’s your About Page's job to tell them how:

    about page helpful

    Thanks for the help Mr. About Page!

    Sadly a lot of people treat their About page like an abandoned station with a boarded up ticket window.  This sad and abandoned About Page is telling visitors they’re in the wrong place and to get off at the next stop:

    about page sad

    Awww Mr. About Page is depressed and not being helpful at all 😞

    As you can see, a great About Page can be the difference between a quick visitor exit and a newly obsessed fan.

    So how do we turn your awkward third-person text fest into a sticky page that leads to more press opportunities, subscribers and rabid fans? By knowing the "anatomy" of a good About Page:

     

     

    Step 4.) Understand the Anatomy of a good About Page

    Essentially your About page has two jobs:

    (1.) Get new readers excited to have found you.

    (2.) Send them to the right place.

    There are a million creative ways to format your About page, but there are a few sections I consider for each page I write:

    1. A Value Proposition
    2. A Day Dream
    3. A Differentiator
    4. A Story
    5. An Offering
    6. A Call to Action

    I like this order, but you can mix and match in a way that works for you. This "Anatomy of an About Page" contains everything I put into about pages I write that cost up to $1,500....so pay close attention and take notes!

     

    anatomy of an about page

    Let’s go through each section, then walk through some examples.

    Here are the different parts of an About Page.....

     

     

    PART 1.) The Value Proposition:

    A value proposition is just a fancy way of answering the question: What is unique and desirable about you?

    That’s it.

    It’s usually just a sentence or two, and works great as an introductory headline. When you use this headline on your About page, you also avoid the dreaded (and completely overused) headline: "About Us."

    Your headline doesn’t need to be catchy or clever or "punchy". It just has to encapsulate what you do, how you’re different and why people should keep reading.

    Here are some example Value Propositions:

    • "Life coaching for people who give a shit" (Liz Goodchild)
    • "A marketplace where people connect to make, sell and buy unique goods" (Etsy)
    • "Tools to grow your website’s traffic" (Sumome)
    • "A marketplace for accomplishment" (Thumbtack)

    For every page I write, I brainstorm at least 25 headlines. And I do this last.

    I’ve found the best stories reveal themselves throughout the writing process and it’s easier to come up with something clear and unique after writing the rest of page.

    But that’s what works for me—you do you.

     

     

    PART 2.) The Day Dream:

    about page day dreaming

    How will your reader’s life be different when they buy/read/subscribe? What does that perfect life look like?

    You’ve likely seen sales pages feature this tactic with the words, "Imagine if…"

    For example:

    • Imagine if you could take your dog anywhere, without worrying he’ll bark at old ladies on the street.
    • Imagine that going to work felt as magical as Christmas morning.
    • Imagine making a full-time salary by selling your jewelry at renaissance faires.

    These stories don’t need to start with the word "imagine," but it’s helpful exercise. You can cut the first few words once you’re done:

    • Take your dog anywhere, without worrying he’ll bark at old ladies on the street.
    • Going to work every day will feel like Christmas morning.
    • Make a full-time salary selling your jewelry at renaissance faires.

    Now write a short paragraph, including pain points, to really make that big idea resonate.

    For example:

    When you first brought Fido home, you imagined taking him everywhere… sitting at your feet while you worked from a coffee shop, running along the beach… but your dreams were quickly dashed when you realized Fido couldn’t go ANYWHERE without barking his cute little head off at every person he saw. You cringe every time you think about that one time he knocked over that patio table, spilling coffee all over your laptop.

    Isn’t that so much better than starting your page off with, "I am a seasoned dog trainer with 12 years experience at the Harvard School for dog barking. I will help train your dog for $50. Call me plz."

     

     

    PART 3.) The Differentiator:

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    I once had a client who, when I asked what made her different from every other yoga clothing store, said, "Well, I started business to be like other yoga apparel stores."

    Instead of backhanding her over Skype, I raised my eyebrows and asked, "Did you really? Why didn’t you just get a job there? Why start a business that already exists in 1000 different incarnations?"

    "Well, I love the buying process. And a lot of those stores say they stock organic products or Fair Trade fabric, but they don’t. Turns out, most of them sell over-priced wellness products that are actually bad for you."

    Now we’re getting somewhere.

    Personally, I started copywriting because I got a headache from all the eye rolling I did while working in tech. I hated when these well-funded, "innovative" tech guys played it safe on their websites, shying away from Human Speak in favor for generic corporate language (HELLO!? Aren’t you supposed to be disruptive"). That’s why, on my About page, I tell a story about when an old boss told me that "personality wasn’t a brand value."

    Because I share that story, almost every new client brings it up during our first session. Every single one of them hired me specifically to add an emotional story their copy, too.

    This tactic works in every industry.

    • House cleaner? Your differentiator might be your homemade cleaning products.
    • Dog trainer? Yours could be an extensive knowledge of canine body language.
    • Renaissance faire jewelry designer? You combine Pinterest trends with necklaces modeled after real pieces in the British Museum.

    We ALL have experiences that makes us uniquely qualified to do what we do. Your About page is the place to share that.

    Draft this section by asking yourself: "What pisses you off about your industry?"

    A photographer might say, "I hate how everyone thinks their cousin can photograph a wedding. It takes a ton of expensive equipment and years of training to develop an eye for capturing deep emotions."

    Now that’s a compelling message. Why not write something like...

    Here are a few other questions to help you brainstorm:

    • How is your approach different?
    • What do you offer that competitors don't?
    • What drives you crazy about your industry?
    • What part of your industry do you want to see changed?
    • Why did you start your own business instead of getting a job with someone else?

     

     

    PART 4.) A Story:

    about page story

    NOW—and only now—is when we include more about you. Talk about your mission, your work history, your awards or your personal story.

    I’m a big fan of getting vulnerable here, even if you run a 100-person start-up in Silicon Valley. While, sure, "No one cares about you, they only care about themselves," (thanks Nev), that’s only true if you tell your story like a robot. As humans, we constantly hunt for connections to our own lives.

    Let’s say you want to get back into shape, but you’ve taken "Netflix and chill" to a whole new level. You decide to hire a personal trainer and get two recommendations from a friend.

    1.) One is a marathon runner who’s been obsessed with running his whole life.

    2.) The second struggled to get off the couch for years until finally losing 112 pounds and running his first marathon. He talks about his own struggles with laziness and how he conquered them using straight-forward goal setting and 15-minute morning routine.

    I haven’t told you anything about their skills, just their stories. But you already have a first choice, don’t you?

    If you get personal, you will retain more visitors and attract more of your perfect customer.

    To help you write this section, use these prompts:

    • Why do you want to help?
    • How did you get involved in this industry/project/topic?
    • Have you experienced this problem before?
    • What questions do clients ask you all the time?

    NOTE: Do not—under any circumstances—write this in the third person. Use "I" or "we" only.

    If you can’t use first person throughout the page, try writing a letter from the CEO here. Huckberry and Groove both do this successfully.

     

     

    PART 5.) An Offering:

    Think back to the last time you discovered someone new online….

    Maybe you Googled "puppy obedience" and you found someone who—FINALLY—provided a training schedule broken down by priority and training duration.

    Her About page talked about her story and experience, followed by an easy way to start absorbing her content and services. She linked to her most popular training videos, a free training calendar download and a quick overview of her online training program.

    You clicked "open in new tab" left right and center.

    Your page should make your readers feel like they’ve just stumbled across the internet’s best-kept secret.

    The Offerings section is a stylized table of contents that helps new readers learn about you while also tackling their biggest problems.

    You could include:

    • A blurb and button to your top 3 services.
    • A list of popular blog posts.
    • Images and links to your bestselling products.
    • Upcoming events

    Before you get overwhelmed, ask yourself: "What ONE thing do you want readers to do after reading your About page?" (Take "grow my list" off the table for a minute, because we’ll go into that later.)

    For my company, I want people to check out my signature offering because it’s a good entry point for retainer clients.

    My yoga apparel client wants new readers to shop—so we feature photos and links to the top products on her site.

    It’s okay to have a few offerings listed here. That yoga client also includes links to her most share-worthy blog posts for those readers not quite ready to buy. Unlike a sales page, you can have a few different off ramps for readers. If you do this well, they’ll explore them all.

     

    PART 6.) A Call To Action:

    Outside of your biggest offerings, you should end on a final call to action. Ideally, this would be an email subscription form.

    I have a pop-up, hello bar and footer opt-in offer, but the form on my About page converts at a significantly higher rate.

    Why?

    Because these are super warmed-up leads who I’ve just convinced I’m worth listening to.

    So if you have a list, here’s the place to promote it.

     

    You're done!

    If your About Page is complete, you will have an About Page that will be grabbing customers by the hand, pointing them where you want, and saving that valuable traffic!

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    Sincerely,

    Neville, Marian, and About Page Man

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    P.S. In the comments leave a link to your own About Page (or one you think is awesome). Just maaayybe Neville, Marian, and About Page Man will take a look at the page and leave some suggestions 😉

    P.P.S. If you need some about page inspiration, here's a free collection of about pages to browse.

     


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    PREACH!

    I stopped working with "those" hype-driven startups for this very reason.

    My last hype-startup client was a very well-funded app-centric company. They had all the "revolutionary/disruptive/meaningful" shit oozing out all over the place. But very early on I noticed they can't even answer simple Q like - what is it you actually offer? who will enjoy this offering? Not to mention the deeper stuff like what are you doing better/differently than everyone else in your field...? In fact, they were so undefined that just trying to do so made one of the co-founders leave, realizing him and his partner where not talking about the same thing all along... crazy right?

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    Thanks, Marian! I definitely agree that we were missing a bit of story. I've already made some changes that I'm excited to test! Thanks again!
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    Guest Marian Schembari

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    I disagree with Neville on this one. Should you pay $1500 for an About page when you're brand new? Nope. But I do think it's such an important part of your website. Even if you only get 30 visitors per month, almost all of them will click on your About page. If it's some boring bio, it won't resonate with any of them. But if it's hyper-targeted, well-written and different from anything else they've ever seen, you could get a good chunk of them converting very quickly.

    For example, my personal About page doesn't get a ton of traffic. No one really goes to my company website unless they've been referred. When I first started out I maybe got 500 visitors per month. But nearly every week I'd get an email from someone saying, "I can't afford you, but I just wanted to say how much your story resonated with me." Or "THANK YOU for saying what you did on your About page. Can I get on your waitlist?"

    Stories do matter, even if your audience is paltry. If you want to stand out quickly, you need to start now.

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    Guest Marian Schembari

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    Luis, it's really REALLY hard to write about yourself. Especially when there's all this pressure to tell an amazing story and encapsulate everything you do into something "short and snappy".

    My advice is to think of your about page more as a series of questions. Print these out, and handwrite the answers. Then, when you're done, format them in a way that makes sense to you (or follow the formula above).

    Here are the real questions I ask my clients (this is to get the juices flowing, you don't need to address every single one on your About page:

    WHEN SOMEONE ASKS WHAT YOU DO OR SELL, WHAT’S YOUR SHORT ANSWER?

    WHAT’S YOUR LONGER ANSWER?

    WHAT WOULD BE YOUR ANSWER IF YOU DIDN’T GIVE A CRAP ABOUT OFFENDING ANYONE?

    WHY IS THIS PROJECT SO IMPORTANT TO YOU?

    ONCE SOMEONE HAS READ YOUR ABOUT PAGE, WHAT ONE THING DO YOU WANT THEM TO DO?

    WHAT KEEPS YOUR IDEAL CLIENT UP AT NIGHT?

    WHAT is HIS / HER GREATEST DESIRE AS IT RELATES TO WHAT YOU SELL?

    WHAT OBJECTIONS MIGHT HE / SHE HAVE ABOUT BUYING WHAT YOU SELL (not price—go deeper)

    HOW IS YOUR APPROACH / SOLUTION TO THE PROBLEM DIFFERENT? WHAT DO YOU OFFER THAT YOUR COMPETITORS DON’T?

    WHAT PISSES YOU OFF ABOUT THE INDUSTRY YOU’RE IN? WHAT PART OF IT DO YOU WANT TO SEE CHANGED?

    Hope these help! Seriously though. Pull out a notebook and handwrite your answers to these questions. The reason answering specific questions work is because we're not pressured to come up with a brilliant story straight off the bat. Baby steps!

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    Super appreciate this! We recently revamped our startup about page, but now I think we might need to do a re-revamp :) Would love to know your initial thoughts: http://www.getcroissant.com/about

    PS. Marian: I love your site logo -- llamas and alpacas are my favorite animals and sometimes when I need cheering up, I'll look up videos of them.

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    Guest Neville

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    Yeah we discussed it.....BUT, a time-pressured Neville was up at 5am to get this post out the door and couldn't perform the entire experiment half-asleep :)

    HOWEVER, I do think this would be pretty awesome. Also....free About Page for me :-D!!

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    Guest Neville

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    Hey Ryan!

    I read the About Page and thought it was WAYYYY too vague. It had nothing about YOU, like a story, or some results you got clients, or why you are so qualified to do this job.

    I think maybe 1-3 paragraphs about you, and then 1-3 snippets of successes or testimonials would help.

    Then also POINT PEOPLE IN THE RIGHT DIRECTION! Like:

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    As you can see, I'm the right guy to hire for building eCommerce websites.

    To schedule a consultation with me (for free), follow these steps:

    1.) Thing

    2.) Thing

    3.) Thing

    I look forward to speaking with you!

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    Guest Marian Schembari

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    Llamas forever! Her name is Beatriz and I imagine she has a very romantic and adventurous life ;-)

    I quite like your about page, especially the formatting. Most are horrifically designed. I would change up some of the headlines though and honestly, no one cares about your "mission". But the idea of making every day inspiring is AWESOME. Make that your first headline.

    I also was a little confused about what you did. It was only until I was at the end of your story section that I realized you were a coworking space. That definitely needs to be clearer. First in headline format, then a description about what that includes and how you're different from the thousands of other spaces out there. You have so much opportunity to tug at some heartstrings here (speaking from a lady who's currently writing from bed), so dig a little deeper into your ideal customers pain points and desires!

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    Guest Neville

    Posted

    Hey there Lois! What if you included some REASONS why you are such a good Pinterest Manager or writer?

    Maybe like:

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    Hey there, I'm Lois, and here's some interesting facts about my Pinterest skills:

    --I've got more than 400,000 re-pins.

    --My account has generated 20,000 clicks in the last 4 months alone.

    --I know how to take a website with zero Pinterest presence, to a top 1,000 account in 3 months.

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    Showing off skills or numbers like this GREATLY increases people's likelihood of taking notice of your service!

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    Guest Neville

    Posted

    Hey Luis, fortunately for you, you're in a VISUAL field where your images/video matter more than your words!

    Perhaps you can do what works for most photographers, and show some highlight pictures from previous weddings.

    I'd rather have my wedding photographer be good at PICTURES than telling stories :-P

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    Guest Neville

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    Hey there Dilini! Your About Page is good, but in the end it doesn't direct people where to go.

    Maybe you can write something like:

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    There are two ways to work with me:

    1.) Schedule a 15 minute phone call and we can discuss your project to see if I am a fit.

    2.) Hire me on UpWork, here is my profile: [LINK]

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    This at least leads people to take an ACTION from your About Page, making it much more valuable to you :-)

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    Hey Neville & Marian,

    WOW!!! What an awesome resource in aiding with creating an outstanding About Us page.

    I can honestly say that my page needs a TOTAL revamp.

    I have some work ahead of me but I'm grateful for the information.

    Thanks again guys,

    Qais

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    Guest Maximilian

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    I got emailed about this post right before I was about to submit copy for an "about us" page for a client.. Definitely made redo a lot of my work before I sent it out.

    More importantly, I enjoy the fact that the call to action is the crotch of the about page.

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    Heya Neville and Marian

    Ok I loved this article but now I'm feeling panicked and anxious! So much info I don't even know where to start... with rule #1 I suppose

    Www.babywash.net

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    Guest Chris Burns

    Posted

    This was such a great post! Thanks for writing it.

    Before I started reading I thought, "I already have a great about page." But I chose to update my page after reading each section anyway, just for kicks. After implementing the first tip (to write a better header), I immediately preferred my new about page over the old one. I was hooked and only stopped reading to implement each of the items in steps 2-6.

    I'm sure my execution is still lacking (it's late and I'm sleepy), but I was so excited I didn't want to stop until I did all 6 things. https://www.clonescriptsoft.com/pages/about

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    Thanks for the comments, Marian! Big help. Adding some social proof is a great idea!!
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    Guest Larissa

    Posted

    Gosh guys, really awesome stuff to work through...now to just do it. Thank you.

    Take a look at The Gallivanting Goose on www.thegg.co.za - your feedback will be most appreciated!

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    Guest Peter Gfader

    Posted

    Thanks for this great advise.

    I am going to re-vamp my about page in the next dayz because of you guys.

    Thanks!!!!

    Peter Gfader

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